If you're not a Jap, don't try and write in Jap stuff. It always ends up being weeb trash when that happens.
Best VNs
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Danganronpa, 999, and their sequels
dangit ron paul is a collection of batshit insane plot twists. A lot of it doesn't make much sense when you look at it closely, but it is a wild ride your first time through. It captivated me more closely than any other game the first time I played it because I was very curious as to what would happen next.
999 on the other hand has less ridiculous characters and story, but it's more of an actual game because there's a whole bunch of different endings and the puzzles are pretty good.
DR2 had better murder cases than 1 (especially Ch. 5) but I'd say everything else was somewhat worse like the less contained setting, less memorable characters (still very fun though), and the ending was pretty cheap (as far as those type of endings go though, I'd say they executed it pretty well).
VLR has more complicated ending/timeline than 999, better characters, and better puzzles but the story is pretty dumb.
What exactly is wrong with the art? I see people complaining about it in every thread but they never give any specific criticism. I can't see any obvious flaws with it but then again I'm not a weeb attention whore.
Try Saya no Uta, it's a real ride. I can also recommend Fate/stay night but it's pretty long.
I would say that it executes it well, as only a maximum of one character gets extra development per each new route, as they fill Rimi's place, effectively keeping the overall atmosphere the same (or even more enhanced, especially with Orihara's route).
I don't like lolis or lewd VNs, but from all of the reaction pics I've seen posted from it I do like the artstyle, at least compared to generic animeshit.
its more about how to make settings, good characters and shit, after all a VN its just a book with pictures in it.
There are some books that help you how to set up a story and stuff.
What are you, a homosexual?
No, loli is an eastern thing. Stop this shit.