Advice plz…

advice plz…
what things are needed to make this rap song awwesome
its my first attempt for political rap

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its not a good rap?

what do u propose for amendments?>>6833872

anons?

I took the EU out back, and I popped it in the skull.

I left it in the front, 'cuz the back was full.

Aryan Bastards hangin' up the flag.

Cuttin' off heads and stuff 'em in the bag.

Muslim's squeeling, dirty fuckin' pigs.

Blood in the basket, slappin' on the nigs.

Kill yourself IO

Brexit, brexit. Fuck the fuckin' Jews.

Cut ya up pretty, and I left the EU.

Heil to the mainland, smokin' up gangland.

Right wing death squads, I'll blast ya with my left hand.

Rap is for darkies, my friend.

Rap is for darkies, psyops for monkeys.

Voting is the noose for the hand of the Nazis.

It's just cringeworthy.

If Snoop Aryan Aryan does it right, it could sound cool.

Yo, what's with the introduction, bro? Why not just come in hard? Tell the niggers who's boss.

Why you name Bolshevik? Is you be commiefag?

lol delete that video man

I couldn't get past 22 seconds. Where is the gunfire? The genuine hatred?

Where is the clicking of the hammers?

Aight fam

^ literally mfw

Moonman, moonman, have you heard?

Hitler's 'gonna glock you, a shot to the back, fool.

Nigger's gonna run when the moon man comes.

Lightin' up your porch with the flare from my shotgun.

Listen to a clip from my nigger Trayvon.

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…Oh shit, he gone!

Roof's in the house, they took he gun.

On a mission from God, to spark the Big One.

Bowlcuts, bowlcuts, boys at the barbershop…

Raise the red flag with the stars for the hot shot.

You think this is a joke, OP? Does the Moonman have to do everything himself?